(Cupid with Arrows; Image from Pixabay)
- The intro draws you in immediately because you want to know why one daughter is so much more beautiful than the other two daughters
- Also, the intro does a good job of using descriptive language when talking about the third daughter's beauty
- The text is from a 3rd person point of view
- It contains very little dialogue
- The author does a great job of describing actions of the people in specific detail, which helps you be able to feel the story and really see it come to life
- Many descriptive words and action words are used, with a LOT of detail, when the author explains how the third daughter is now being praised as if she were the new goddess Venus, and how everyone now looks to her instead of looking at Venus
- I think it would be a cool plot twist if instead of Venus getting angry, she could end up becoming best friends with the third daughter
- Another plot twist that could add more to the story would be if Cupid declined his mothers wishes, and the story ended with Cupid staying on the mainland while his mother went back
- In my story, I would want to eliminate some of the descriptive language because I feel like it bogs down th entirety of the story; instead, in place of all the descriptive language, I would like to add in more dialogue in order to make the characters interact more.
- Another thing that could be done is to have the story told from Psyche's point of view as wel. Sort of like a compare and contrast story.
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